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Author’s note: This one is quite dark, and a little rough. Reader discretion is advised. For some reason, I wanted to try it in second-person perspective. We’ll all just have to see how it goes.

You make your way to room inside a concrete bunker, having been checked, rechecked, searched, stripped, hosed and put into a hazmat suit. You wait while a door slides open, letting you into a small chamber. After the door behind you closes, the door in front of you opens, and you can see into a room.

In the middle of the room is a girl.

She is naked, Lust personified. A wet dream come to life.Wanton appetite desperate for physicial attention.

You start to head toward her, and suddenly, you feel a shock running through your body.

“Sorry about that. Its a defence mechanism to keep the orderlies from touching the patient.” A voice says over an intercom.

You watch her for a moment, and then turn, and leave the room.

Later, you are talking with the man whose voice you heard over the intercom.

“Strange case.” You say.

“Yes. We think she produces a pheromone that makes her almost irresistible to anyone who comes too close. And the effect isnt just on men, either. We tried having females look after her, but they fell under her spell almost as quickly as the men did. Finally, we had to install the shock plate to protect her.”

“Interesting.” You say.

“And that’s not all. She has some kind of healing factor we cannot even begin to explain. She tried to commit suicide with a sharp edge of a mirror, and the cut healed before she was finished making the stroke. “

“Remarkable.”

“And that’s still not the weirdest thing. We ran her fingerprints when we found her, and they came back as a man’s.”

“Oh? Whose, if I may ask.” You say.

“Name was Alan Jenkins. According to our records, he was 35 years old, and the reason his prints where in the system was because he’d been accused of raping young kids. The last victim was a boy, and he was found half beat to death.”

“How could he go from that to being the ... creature in that room?” you ask.

“Dam if we know. He was given bail at his trial, and skipped. No one saw or heard anything more about him until we found this woman with his fingerprints.”

Soon, you leave the facility, and once outside, you allow a smile to cross your face. Then your body changes, and soon you look like a woman with wings and sharp claws for hands. You recall the prayer for vengeance from the bloody mouth of a girl who happened to look like a boy. Somehow, her need breached the barrier between where you were and this world, and you found yourself answering her call.

You resolved to go visit her in the hospital, and show her what has become of her attacker, and you hope she will be pleased with the results. Originally, you planned to return to the place you came from after you fulfilled this prayer, but now that you are here, you can hear all around you the cries of the innocent seeking vengeance.

You think to yourself, “obviously there is still a lot of work to do.”

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Good

This sound like a good start to a longer story. I hope that you get good vibes and feed back and exspand it -- HUGS TO YOU GIRL --RICHIE2

thanks, Richie

We'll just have to see if my muse finds more for this one.

Thanks for commenting.

Dorothycolleen, member of Bailey's Angels

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Actually I'm with Richie2

on this one this seems more like a prologue to a larger story or series.
Good Job Honey I liked this.
*Great Big Angel Hugs*
Bailey.

Bailey Summers

thanks, Bailey

We'll just have to see. I've got other fish to fry at the moment.

Dorothycolleen, member of Bailey's Angels

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Ooh.

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Prawns, maybe? =)

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I've never cooked prawns

being allergic to shellfish, I dont cook stuff like that. Huggles!

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Hmm...

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Just regular fish then. All the more Prawns for me. :)

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You

A dark story of justice.

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine
    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

I hope this 'me' will be

I hope this 'me' will be stopped... because an eye for an eye will turn the whole world blind...

a good story though,

grtz & hugs,

Sarah xxx

I happen to agree with you, Sarah

I've had fantasies of hurting the man who hurt me, but at the end of the day, I think you're right.

Thanks for comment.

Dorothycolleen, member of Bailey's Angels

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nice little tale

sometimes a little dark is nice too.
thanks

thanks, LoneWolf

I could have gone a lot darker with this, but I managed to rein it in a bit. Glad you liked it, and thanks for commenting.

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Crime + justice

Crime + justice = Your story. When a crime is horrific the justice to balance that crime can be equally horrific. I do not consider death penalty a part of justice but we do need to treat violent crimes with a lot more dispatch and severity. If the penitent is forced to realy come to see there violation of another as a crime, then there may be a chance to reform these individuals and return them to the civilian world. If not keep them locked up.
Here the punishment fit the crime. Please continue the story it's very interesting.

The only bad question is the one not asked.
Why do we insist to punish the victim while grudgingly condemning the criminal?

The only bad question is the one not asked.

Thanks Nova

I dont know why we tend to punish the victim. What's even worse is when the victim punishes themselves, like I did.

Thanks for commenting.

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So the dark angel turned Adam Jenkins into a woman.

Good! Any grown man who would abuse women and children, should have complete srs when they are found guilty and the judgement affirmed by the appeals and supreme courts. These men are purveyors of evil and we must find a way to stop them. Srs would be the only way I know of, since eliminating testosterone from their bodies would curb their libibos. ABUSE MUST STOP!!!

The girl in the room had what was done to her, coming, and vengeance is mine sayeth the Lord.

"With confidence and forbearance, we will have the strength to move forward."

Love & hugs,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

"With confidence and forbearance, we will have the strength to move forward."

Love & hugs,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

thanks, Barbra

I worried that it might be too much, so I curtailed the description a touch. Thanks for commenting.

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=)

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The second person perspective takes a little getting used to, but this story could be the start of something awesome. ^_^
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Part of me disagrees with Barbara's suggestion though. Sex offenders (in real life, at least) shouldn't get SRS, they should just be castrated. I don't believe that they deserve the honor of becoming women. Even if it were a punishment to them, performing all that SRS would get very expensive. Taxpayers might get rather disillusioned if they were having to fund it, and it could lead to delays in the treatment of ...well, us. :|

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thanks, Extravagance

I agree with you. Not to mention some poor desperate trans person might "confess" to abuse just to get the surgery .....
Thanks for commenting.

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I agree with Cat-Girl, but

The authorities could also cut off all but 1 cm of his dick. Castration might stop his crime (but maybe not, it's about power more than sex, right?). The penectomy is his punishment.

Hugs and Bright Blessings,
Renee

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Hugs and Bright Blessings,
Renee

about power, not sex

I read somewhere that castrated abusers just start using object as a substitute. Keep em locked up, that's the best I can see.

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That's a good start.

True retribution would involve turning off the shock plate.


The girl in me...
She's always there and she is not feeling merciful
toward that scum.

hard to feel sorry for him, yes.

we dont know how long she was there before they installed the plate, do we? But still, I worry this might be a touch too far.

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i'm curious if the

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i'm curious if the transformed girl can be reformed or if this will be her eternity.