Susan Brown

I was wondering?

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Having recently completed my entry for the latest competition; it got me thinking about what makes a sucessfull story.

The story was quite long in excess of 22k. Hits and feedback were quite low compared to my other writings.

I have always believed in the 'grab their attention quickly' school of thinking when writing short stories. Perhaps the opening lines may have put people off...

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Cats

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Here I am sitting in sunny, if very blowy Lincolnshire, that's in the UK for those, like me who never paid attention in geography lessons.

I have lost count of the amount of times I have had to let Ellie Mae and Biscuit (our cats) in and out of the house today. As soon as they go out, they realise that it's windy and they want to come in again!

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Billy Joel

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I was just listening to one of my favorite tracks by Billie Joel, We did'nt start the fire:

Harry Truman, Doris Day, Red China, Johnnie Ray
South Pacific, Walter Winchell, Joe DiMaggio

Joe McCarthy, Richard Nixon, Studebaker, television
North Korea, South Korea, Marilyn Monroe

Rosenbergs, H-bomb, Sugar Ray, Panmunjom
Brando, "The King and I" and "The Catcher in the Rye"

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Orphan ~ 18

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‘No, I can’t have been that good!’

‘Yes you were dear; quite amazing. We have one or two swats here, but judging by this test, you will give them a run for their money. You must have known how intelligent you are?’


 
Orphan 18

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Dyslexia - a pain in the bum!

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My broadband is back and finally working OK, (Wooohoo!)No more having to speak Outer Mongolianese to sort out my internet woes.

Anyway, I was going to start a new chapter of Working Girl. To refresh my poor memory, I went back over the previous chapter and saw that I had made a lot of silly mistakes in formatting and spelling.

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Normal service will be resumed...

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I would like to apologise to my several readers (including my dog Gemma, and cats, Biscuit and Ellie), for the infrequent updates to my stories.

It is a tale of woe to match any saga.

There I was on the Internet, surfing away merrily, a light song on my lips, when suddenly it happened.

My connection dropped.

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Orphan ~ 17

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The head mistress looked at me and then Matron.

‘Well Connie, this is the youngster you was talking about?’

'Yes, Millie, this is Stephanie.’

I tried to smile but I think that it came out as a grimace.

‘Well, you had both better come in then.’


 
Orphan 17

by Susan Brown

Working Girl ~ Life Goes On! 4

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Looking at the note left me with a feeling of dread. Here I was on holiday on this lovely cruise ship, trying to get away from my problems and enjoy myself for once and some weirdo has sent me more flowers than at a rock stars funeral.


Working Girl ~ Life Goes On! 4

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Angel

Working Girl ~ Life Goes On! 1

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My stepfather or shall I say bigamous stepfather and murderer of my mother looked smug as he stood in the dock.

Working Girl ~ Life Goes On!

By Susan Brown

Angel

You may want to read the thrilling non stop original Working Girl first, cos if you don't, you'll have no idea what the story is about, and now on with the show...

Mirror mirror on the wall...

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A friend of mine told me this little snippet:

Pick up a mirror, lie on your back and look at the reflection of your face; this is what you looked like ten years ago.

Sit up and look at your face in the mirror; this is obviously what you look like now.

Put the mirror on your bed/ floor and look down at your reflection; this is what you will look like in ten years time.

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Orphan ~ 10

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The coloured lights were flashing and the bomp; bomp of the music was entering my very soul. Pinball Wizard reverberated around the confined area of the discothá¨que and Roger Daltrey’s incredibly loud vocals was making my head spin.

Orphan 10
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Orphan ~ 8

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Paula had her transistor radio and switched it on. In no time, we were laughing shouting and stomping to ‘Bits and Pieces’ someone said that the Dave Clark Five were splitting up and that was sad cos they used to make good songs.

Orphan 8
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Susan Brown

Drop off

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I have noticed that there appears to be a bit of a drop off re reader hits for my stories.

I was wondering if it's because they are bad stories (sob; hits head against convenient brick wall) or if it's just a general trend as there is so much good stuff to read and people have not got the time to read everything.

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Dear Worried of Hartlepool

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Dear Worried of Hartlepool,

I have read you letter with some concern.

You appear to have let yourself go slightly. Your wife, being more sensible and of a higher intelligence has left you and you wonder why?

Perhaps, if you had got off your backside and got a job she may have stayed, but it is unlikely.

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Through The Window

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Through The Window

By Susan Brown

As a child, Angela had been quite lucky. Being in a relatively well off family, the children had been educated at home and Angela was able to be herself for most of the time. She thanked God for her loving and understanding parents that allowed her to be her real self.

    
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