Jake's story Part 1-3

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Needs work or an editor to help

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Title says it all. Many incorrect words or misspelled words throughout the story and needs idea or speaker separation by using more paragraphs.

good start

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pretty good start :) as for pointing out mistakes... not gonna happen. I was always taught unless your willing to step up and help, just enjoy it :) (not excatly how grandpa put it, but somethings can't be shared) :P

I play online games *rolls eyes* yes I am one of those people :P
Fav puplished authors atm are Patricia Briggs (Mercy Thompson series),Carrie Vaughn (Kitty series), Kim Harrision.

Good story will look forward

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Good story will look forward too how thing's develop for the new girl from here on out:).

I fink it grate kayla

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plase keip it goin.

LoL
Rita

Age is an issue of mind over matter.
If you don't mind, it doesn't matter!
(Mark Twain)

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Rita

Your story does not make very

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Your story does not make very much sense if this company is doing this it is illegal and making the main character who hates trans people a real girl defeats the main purpose also it was to short and the protagonist would have been overwhelmed by the estrogen and cried

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