Serious Camouflage

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Please continue…..

….with this story, I’m enjoying it immensely! Interesting to see how this pans out.
Keep ‘em coming.

thank you

Thanks for reading and writing

Unfortunately, 'keep em coming' is nice, but I'm still trying to work out where to take this one

your short-order cook,

Leslie

Well worth reading

Puhleeeeze continue this story. It has so much potential.

thank you

Dear Guest,

I hope you don't mind me calling you by your first name.

What to do and where to go? Just how much are we going to do to this poor child? I want him to be happy and find the security that he has struggled for. Yet, there is so much more...

Always happy to reply,

Leslie

Will his disguise prove to be so much fun that he considers it a change in his future?

Camouflage fooling whom...

while I'm enjoying the story, I think Ethan and his mom are getting in over their heads. Abby is in the market to gain an audience and he/she's added to that possibility. It will be more interesting to see what the doctor says.

Jessie C

Jessica E. Connors

Jessica Connors

Thank yoi

You make a very interesting point. I’ve tried to leave a lot of potential ways to head in this one. Hmmm.

Had my doubts

At first. But the more I read, the more I liked it. More of this would go down a treat!

Now, the question is: Is he selling a bill of goods to everybody? Including himself? Has Emma been waiting for a chance to break out? I'm guessing the therapist will be thrilled at a real sign of progress and give her okay for him to continue, at least in the short term. I wonder if the therapist might have some education on trans issues? "You aren't pretending to be trans, you ARE trans!"

And I wonder if Abbey might be a lesbian that might take a liking for girlyboys, or at least one in particular?


"Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.”
George Carlin

thank you

You have covered a lot of ground!

I'm sorry that you had your doubts! But, honesty is best.

Continuation

Please carry on with this story, it already offers a lot and it has so much potential. Ethan has a seriously damaged psyche and while hiding as Emma may work, it won't if uncontrolled exposure as Ethan occurs. If he recovers sufficiently, in his Emma identity then exposure on his terms maybe OK. This is a delicate line between creating further damage to Ethan or having Emma flower into the person she could be. There are a lot of pitfalls on this road but I don't think the gaming company is one of them. Emma has so much more to bring them that I don't think Ethan's exposure is in their interest.

thank you

so much food for thought

Continuation

Please carry on with this story, it already offers a lot and it has so much potential. Ethan has a seriously damaged psyche and while hiding as Emma may work, it won't if uncontrolled exposure as Ethan occurs. If he recovers sufficiently, in his Emma identity then exposure on his terms maybe OK. This is a delicate line between creating further damage to Ethan or having Emma flower into the person she could be. There are a lot of pitfalls on this road but I don't think the gaming company is one of them. Emma has so much more to bring them that I don't think Ethan's exposure is in their interest.

Please continue

I love your writing and this story has started off great so please give us more. I get that you are not sure where you are taking us but I’m with you for the ride.
Joan

Valleys Girls

thank you

the most fun is going back and rereading the story and thinking about where it could go... I'm enjoying the possibilities. Hang on and we'll see what happens. The nice thing about creating a story here is the ability to adjust. This is a great site for readers and writers.