I could use some feedback

A word from our sponsor:

The Breast Form Store Little Imperfections Big Rewards Sale Banner Ad (Save up to 50% off)

I am attempting to do something totally different for my next story: do it as if it was a script for a play. If anybody has any experience in that format they are willing to share, I'd love to get feedback ...

Click Like or Love to appropriately show your appreciation for this post: