A Gift From Santa

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December 2024 Change A Life Christmas Story Contest Entry


Chapter One

It seems like every year, there are more children on the naughty list. Yes, I make this list and check it twice. I always know who’s been naughty or nice. That’s right, I’m Santa Claus, Saint Nicholas, Father Christmas—whatever you call me, I’m still the jolly old fat man with rosy cheeks and a belly that shakes like a bowl full of jelly.

Today, I’m lounging on my big, comfy davenport, sipping cocoa and nibbling cookies while pondering a troubling thought: what should I do about all the naughty children in the world? Coal used to be my go-to solution, but with modern technology turning coal into diamonds, it feels like too precious a punishment. And let’s face it, not all those kids are truly naughty; some are just misunderstood.

I get up, brush crumbs from my coat, and shuffle over to the monitors that show me the lives of children all over the world. No, I’m not a pervert, so don’t go thinking that. My magical system automatically blurs private moments. Even Santa has boundaries.
For the past few weeks, I’ve been particularly interested in two children: Amanda and Trevor, nine-year-old twins. These kids have been on the nice list their entire lives—not a single naughty act between them. It’s a rarity, believe me. Most kids slip up now and then. But Amanda and Trevor are different. Scratch that. Max and Chelsea are different. Let me explain.

You see, Amanda and Trevor were the names given to them at birth, but deep down, Amanda knows she’s Max, a boy, and Trevor knows she’s Chelsea, a girl. They’ve never told anyone their true identities, not even each other, but I know. Santa always knows. And I’ve chosen to honor the names and identities they’ve chosen for themselves.

On one of the screens, I see Chelsea raking leaves in the yard while Max folds laundry inside. Their father, Richard, looms nearby, his critical gaze making my cocoa curdle. Richard is the kind of man who sees the world in rigid, black-and-white terms. He doesn’t know—or perhaps doesn’t want to know—who his children truly are.

"Good job, son," Richard says, clapping Chelsea on the shoulder. She flinches but keeps raking. Richard’s words sting, though not for the reason he might think. Chelsea’s not ungrateful for the praise; she just wishes it could come without the constant misgendering.
"Thanks, Dad," she mutters, her voice barely above a whisper.

"Did you sign up for hockey like I told you to?" Richard asks, his tone sharp.
"Yes, Dad," Chelsea replies, her hands tightening around the rake.

"Good boy. How were tryouts?"

Chelsea looks at the ground, her voice trembling. "I didn’t make the team."

Right on cue, Richard’s face darkens. "You didn’t make the team? I’m not raising a loser! Get inside, now! And no supper for you tonight."
Chelsea’s eyes well with tears, but she obeys, retreating to her room without another word. Upstairs, she collapses onto her bed, burying her face in the pillow to stifle her sobs. My heart aches for her. If only Richard could see what I see: a resilient, courageous child trying her best in a world that doesn’t always understand her.

Meanwhile, Max is inside, neatly folding laundry. He moves with the precision of someone who’s learned to avoid attracting attention. But even his careful demeanor doesn’t spare him from Richard’s wrath.
"Amanda!" Richard barks, storming into the room. "How many times have I told you to stay out of my way?"
"I wasn’t in your way," Max protests softly.

"Don’t talk back to me, young lady! Go to your room. No supper for you either."

Max’s lips quiver, but he holds back the tears until he’s alone. Upstairs, he sits on his bed, staring at the ceiling.
As I watch both children crying, my heart breaks. They’ve done nothing to deserve this. In fact, they’re among the kindest, most well-behaved children I’ve ever seen. It’s their parents who belong on the naughty list, not them. I decide then and there to intervene.
With a twitch of my nose and a twinkle of my thumb, I use my Christmas magic to bring Max and Chelsea to my workshop. In an instant, they’re standing before me, wide-eyed and bewildered.

"Ho, ho, ho!" I greet them warmly. "Don’t be afraid, Max and Chelsea. You’re safe here."
Their jaws drop. "How do you know our names?" Max asks.

"I’m Santa Claus," I reply with a chuckle. "I know everything about you—even the names you haven’t shared with anyone else."
Chelsea’s eyes fill with tears. "So, you know I’ve been bad," she whispers.

"Oh, no, no, no," I say, shaking my head. "You’re both on the nice list. Your father doesn’t decide who’s naughty or nice. That’s my job, and I’ve never seen either of you do anything to deserve being called naughty."

The tension in their shoulders eases, and they share a small, hopeful smile.
"But I didn’t bring you here just to tell you that," I continue. "I brought you here because I want to give you both a very special gift. These aren’t gifts you’ll find under a tree. They’re gifts that will change your lives forever."

"What kind of gifts?" Max asks, his voice filled with wonder.

I smile warmly. "Max, I’m giving you the gift of boyhood. From this moment forward, you’ll be a real boy. And Chelsea, I’m giving you the gift of girlhood. You’ll be a real girl."

Their faces light up with joy. For the first time, they look truly at peace.
"But what about our parents?" Max asks hesitantly.

"Your parents won’t remember you," I explain gently. "You’ll go to a new family, one that loves and supports you for who you are. They’ve been waiting for you, and they’re ready to welcome you with open arms."

Tears of relief stream down their faces, but I hold up a hand. "There is one condition. Before I give you these gifts, I need your help."
"What kind of help?" Chelsea asks.

I point to a screen showing a boy named Jeremy. "He’s been on the naughty list for four years. I want you to help him change his ways."
"How can we do that?" Max asks. "Christmas is only eighteen days away."

I grin. "Haven’t you ever wondered how I deliver all those presents in one night? I have a time machine. You’ll use it to go back and make a difference in Jeremy’s life."

"What if we can’t do it?" Chelsea asks nervously.

"If you try your best, that’s all I ask," I reassure them. "But I believe in you."
I lead them to the time machine, handing each of them a bracelet. "These will keep you together and bring you back when the job is done. Are you ready?"

They nod, determination in their eyes. As the machine hums to life, I wave them off with a hearty, "Good luck!"
And with that, their adventure begins.

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I'm Trying

(I'm not sure I know how to deliver constructive criticism without running afoul of the moderators, which seems incredibly easy, but I'm going to try anyway. And, if this message gets deleted, oh, well, I guess I'll stop even trying.)

I felt you took a straightforward story idea and then lost focus and ran off in various other directions. The story's premise cries out for Santa to just swap the two of them. There'd be no need to find them a new family, since they'd each be happy where they were, despite the petulant, cranky father. And, if Santa wants them to fix someone who's "naughty," their father is the obvious choice.

All the elements are there, and you set it up nicely, but you didn't follow through. The time machine and bracelets are sci-fi flourishes that belong in some other story you want to write. (This one seems like it intended to focus on Santa/Christmas magic.) It's great to get ideas, but you don't have to pack them all in one story.

that make sense

This all came from my head. I didn't think of it being sci-fi. The point of the story isn't to help their father or mother, but to help a child, which fits into the story later.
Thanks for commenting.

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Should be interesting to see

Should be interesting to see how the two new children are able to help Jeremy get on the 'nice' list. Wonder if he as well is TG and that is why Santa wants the two of them to help him?

Really?

It's fiction you can write about whatever you want, however you want. If your Santa has magic and technology, cool. Great start, can't wait for more.

nomad

nicely done

Congratulations on this new take on Santa's sleigh ride. I love that he still has magic but even that can't cover the world all at once, it's both illogical and logical at the same time- it's brilliant!

I hope you are writing a follow-up, this story is a nice change from your other series you have done so far. It's open-ended and even if you don't write a follow-up it ended perfectly.

I'm told STFU more times in a day than most people get told in a lifetime

thanks

I am going to continue this story, but it's going to be a short story about 2-3 chapters. It's fun to write what Santa has to say.
So have you been good this year? I won't know, but Santa does. You better watch out ;)

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Advice is never ill meant

I agree with Pippa, wouldn't it be more elegant to have them swap bodies, and work Santa's magic on the father ?(I'm Not a writer, but a vociferous reader) Wouldn't this make further chapters easier for you to write, and less complicated ?
'Those that can't, coach'
I have been soo good 8-)

Cefin

yes it would

But then the story wouldnt have an even happier ending that I am writting. just wait and see.

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Neat story

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So Santa is now high tech. That's neat.

The kid's dad is one scum piece of work. Not only is it wrong to blame a child who isn't skilled at a sport for not making the team, it's just as bad to take the anger out on another.

Dad needs fixed alright, but it would take a doctor to do the work. Either between his legs or above his nose.

How the kids will help Jeremy will be interesting to see.

Others have feelings too.

Happy Christmas

I really wanted to finish the next chapters by Christmas, but since it is Christmas to some people and I have been working hard writing my other stories, I will be finishing this story up after Christmas. It may sound funny putting out a Christmas story after the holiday is over, but sometimes planning doesn't work out for writers. Hope no one thinks it's weird reading a Christmas story in January when I do post it.

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