Toni is in Light Avenue, yes! on a worknight, and what has she agreed to? Worse, what has she done to herself? Nothing other than invite the barman who was flirting with her to join her for a drink. What he wants from her she can’t even begin to fathom but considering the flirting it must involve man and woman things. What’s she going to do?
And worse, how does she continue her life after that? If she doesn’t drop dead from shame on the spot she’ll have to continue working on the healthcare report from work. She’ll have to continue having actual guys as friends knowing she, well... maybe likes doing things with them. Depending on how her drink with Jackson goes... If it’s not a joke... It’s all in Toni’s future, and all of her own making.
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A new, updated version of 'Toni With An i is' available on swolle.eu with the name of The Pattern In My Chest. There's also some fun stuff like very silly promo images and some pop banger playlists, do check it out!
The Toni With An I story is improved in many ways. All the parts I have ready for an imminent release will be released on that site in the coming weeks, then as an ePub. All of the story remains free on that site, my personal site, and the plans are for the ePub to be available for free, too. Later parts not yet edited for a soon-to-come release will remain on BCTS. You can get two goes at Toni, the early version and the later version.
Thanks for the support, here, staff and readers! New writing from me will continue to appear on BCTS. This place is too valuable to trans fiction to ever ignore the impact it's had on so many people!
Comments
it all feels normal.
reminds me of my first attempt to be in the workforce as Dorothy. and the whole awkward thing with Jackson was adorkable
the first chapter
the first chapter was really rough i almost gave up on it im glad i didnt its turning into a really good story keep it up .the conversations between the friends are great
Even the burger.
The descriptions are wonderful. The internal monologue is wonderful. The dialogue is beyond wonderful. Even the BURGER is wonderful. I love this story!
I can’t even identify the part I liked best. Was it the double-trans dialogue, where they are apologizing to each other for exactly the right things, and accepting each other’s apologies and getting past it? Was it the crazy laundromat people (“so much money”)? Was it Toni fretting about having legs? Was it the bartender telling her to dopeslap Steve? Or perhaps the dopeslap itself? All of it was good. Better than good.
I want a burger!
Emma
I his one added a real twist!
You keep adding new layers, but each level has new people who actually care about each other.
Toni even seems to be getting straightened out at work!
My best approximation for that burger might be a place in Amarillo. I couldn’t eat half of it. But it made a great dinner after I got to my brother’s house the next day.
Gillian Cairns
I his one added a real twist!
You keep adding new layers, but each level has new people who actually care about each other.
Toni even seems to be getting straightened out at work!
My best approximation for that burger might be a place in Amarillo. I couldn’t eat half of it. But it made a great dinner after I got to my brother’s house the next day.
Gillian Cairns
So good . . .
The conversations sound exactly like they would be in the real world.
The anxieties are all exactly as the are in the real world.
I'm loving the story - remembering to keep the time to take in the whole chapter in one sitting because it drags you in so you best get comfortable.
Can I have onion on my burger please and maybe some ranch sauce? Yea. I know, but we're all individuals. . . .
Hugs&Kudos!
Suzi
True Gem
OK Ms W, time to fess up. Where have you been hiding this incredibly good story-telling and writing? Why haven't I run across it before? From the banter of friends over beers to the aching desire of the sensuous first kiss, your writing is stunningly good. And the twist of the central character who is so eager to express her femininity is just plain delicious. I'll read everything you ever write, with great anticipation. Thank you dear, thank you. Rianna in Iowa
No hiding
I've not been hiding anywhere, the message is appreciated though, really! :D I've been writing a few years, now. You can find out a little about my personal story on my BCTS author page, here.
As for the writing, I decided to read back after your lovely comment and there were some obvious flaws in this. Hopefully if I publish all this on Kindle or the like I'll have enough distance from it to correct the language level mistakes. It's the nature of writing and publishing quickly. It's also reminded me of areas where I need to go again and call back to in the story. Which is why I'm taking a break from writing at the moment. Writing just didn't feel fresh — but there's still another 60,000 words of Toni With An i published, as I write this, and about 40,000 words of Allison Zero — and more to come — re-reading has inspired me. I think there's something special to this, at least for me, personally.