So, as it says on the tin, I'm looking for a pre-reader to give solid, detailed feedback on plot, character development and world building. I don't need my ego stroked, but if the limit of the feedback is it's great/sucked, that doesn't help me. I need someone who can articulate, in depth how they are/aren't enjoying the overall story, the world the story is told in, and the characters as they interact with each other.
While being able to review spelling/punctuation/grammar is a plus, at this stage, It's not what I'm looking for. Right now, I need to get a sense of how the story is progressing from a narrative, not mechanical build up.
This story contains the following, so if these bother you, you know:
Consensual sex of both a homosexual and heterosexual nature.
Realistic depictions of violence of both a 'modern' and 'fantasy' setting.
Historically accurate depictions of Irish folklore about Fae
Frank discussions of the 'N-word'
Characters in interracial relationships and frank discussions of the difficulties of same.
Assault based on racial and sexual prejudice and the aftermath of it.
Good parenting (I know, it's rare...! :D)
Above all the successful applicant (my goodness that sounds conceited!) MUST be able to respond quickly. This story if evolving rapidly (21,000 words in 5 days) so detailed but RAPID responses are a MUST!
Comments
Text to Speech
In the absence of a strong editorial services you may find it helpful to have a text to speech engine read your story to you. I find it helpful and I use the worst engine I can find, which is "flite" on linux cli. The reason I choose a bad text to speech is that it does not try to second guess and gloss over problems in the text.
You may also consider getting on the discord and asking for help there. Either in the "general" channel or in the "editors" channel:
https://discord.gg/7jqV9HU
Good luck and I look forward to seeing your work.
Crescenda.
AKA
Your friend
Crash
This post feels like it lacks a certain je ne sais quoi
It lacks depth and doesn't bring out the pathos needed in your other stories. Maybe more tears and laughter, humor sometimes can be cruel, can add gravitas in an otherwise cookie-cutter protagonist. This also reads too precise and presents to the reader barely an outline. However, the inclusion of real world issues is a positive note in an aspiring world on the cusp of being brought forth into a new reality. The hero on the other hand, is going to have to remain pure to succeed in their goals. The writing itself is crisp and precise, with only a few errors to mar the wordsmithing efforts, so that is definitely a check on the plus column. The only marring comes in the form of a fourth wall smudging towards the end, but is not heavily distracting and is a gentle nod to the reader. The closing of the post shows the author to be a harried individual whose Muse, while possibly diving them mad, also leads them further along in the story at an almost frenetic pace. While this is indeed great news for the author, the stress might lead them to want to demand the same levels of perfection they drive themselves toward. Add the stats up, and we get 8.9 out of 10 stars. While not as good as their other posts, this one will lead them to true greatness!
Diana
ps I hope you know that I find your stories to be great. This is not meant to mock, but rather to illustrate that your worst works are far superior to many artists of words, and I have faith you will do well. I have learned a lot about writing, world building, and character development from reading your stories and know I could never hope to reach your levels. Be safe, be healthy, and take care /hugs
Well played!
*Doffs cap* Anything else is mere gilding the lily. Well played indeed.
I'm out of my mind and into yours!
Geekydee
Extremely well written job application
However. Line 16. Word 8. I believe the word is driving and not diving. Unless we are plumbing the depths of both humour and the written language
:)
I blame my cats
I have most of my desk cleared off, and they fight to be the one to lay on the light up keyboard... /sigh
Limit
Just hit mine, which is proofreading spelling and grammar
Awww Dang!
I was hoping you needed a pre-reader for another installment of Game Time... the Fae aspect definitely removes Game Time from the board. Having a knowledge of The Old Republic environs, sans the alternate reality you went with Malgus surviving, pre-reading would be quite enticing.