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CONSCRIPTED!
Copyright © Tracy Lane, 2017/2021.
Note: this story is set in the Tranziverse; the protagonist is biologically male but looks anatomically female.
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His mother..
His mother is abusive and he should be removed from her care.
Interesting viewpoint
So, a fictional child should taken from an imaginary parent over non-existent abuse. Interesting viewpoint.
Take it as a compliment
Your writing was effective enough to draw real emotions from the reader. That is something to which all writers aspire.
I found the mother to be abusive, too -- especially the part where she stripped him naked in front of other people. In real life, she could have gotten arrested for that and, if the city attorney was particularly aggressive, charged with child pornography.
So you wrote the mother quite effectively. She came off as somewhere between uncaring and downright abusive. We could tell that she was getting impatient with her son's insistence that she take his desires into account, and his lack of cooperation as she insisted that he strip naked in front of strangers. We could tell that she ran a tight ship.
The child was written effectively, too, because we the readers could feel his humiliation and helplessness.
Some people are fond of the 'Forced Fem' TG theme, and some find it disturbing. It's a matter of taste.
The System
Would he be better off in the system? Children die in the system. Children get trafficked in the system.
Just a sec
How can it be both a solo and an ongoing story at the same time?
"Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.”
George Carlin