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A good start......
And an intriguing idea - but I would suggest finding a good editor. The story line is promising, but you have multiple grammatical errors. Someone to proofread and correct them would be a good idea.
Please consider this constructive criticism, and keep writing. I hope to see where you take this.
Dallas
D. Eden
Dum Vivimus, Vivamus
Deleep
I'm sorry I was confused, did she have her father executed?
Nice start
Will there be more to this? I hope that she gets to the US and starts a new life. Great start.
I've had a lot of non military exposure to Middle Eastern culture, and it changed me. Several of my stories are set in those cultures.
Gwen