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Hey everyone. I guess some of you think my story is to graphic or explicit to be here. But there are other credible authors here that have written explicit sex in their stories too. There are also explicit sexual content in many romance novels. Sandra Brown is one example. Shes one of my favorites too.
But anyhow, I seem to remember a especelly explicit near novel length story here a few years ago about a young collage age guy with a effeminate looking body offered himself to a dominant male to transform. He humiliated him or her quite abit and it had explicit descriptions of sex. the story behind it was he was a killer, he killed the guys sister and at the end, the transsexual killed him.
I liked it, does anyone remember that story here, i cant remember who wrote it or even the title :(.

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Betrayal

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I believe the story you are referring to is Betrayal by Julie O. An excellent story of love and justice, though it may not seem that way at the start. It is dark and graphic, but if you stick with it, the finale is quite rewarding.

Scott
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Betrayal sounds like it

Some of Julie's stuff is very dark compared to my lightheartted stuff or Scott's far more serious stories.

Fruit of the Vine is another strange one. Ultimately her stories involve justice, sometimes redemption of the evil doer, the victim making a sucess of the ruins of a involuntarily transformed life.

You may find her works a useful guide to improve yours. One thing Julie is good about -- though sometimes it takes a while to get there, but then when you do it *works* -- is she provides the reader the motivations of why characters did what they did, or at least solid clues.

As you write and as you edit/proof ask tyourself "Why does X do this? What is X's motivation?" That will go a long way to keeping the readers satisfied, even in dark, graphic stories.

John in Wauwatosa

John in Wauwatosa

motivations

John if you read my latest work here, all of motivations are clear.

I think that John ...

... was referring to understanding a character's motivations during the story and not discovering them at the very end. If that's the case, then I agree. If you know why someone is doing what they are doing, or at least aren't completely in the dark, then you can make judgments along the way -- it makes it more interesting because you're more involved. It especially puts a large burden on the reader when he doesn't know enough to cheer or boo the main characters. This extreme, which fortunately doesn't happen too often, puts a "freeze" on the emotional content of the story until it all gets sorted out -- not good. Further, a character's motivations should be reasonable and at least somewhat realistic: insane behavior or unrelenting, unaccounted for cruelty in a story bores me and makes me want to take a nap.

Aardvark

"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."

Mahatma Gandhi

"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."

Mahatma Gandhi

Write what you want

It's your story. In a story, cruelty, torture, and even child abuse is fair game under the right circumstances -- and even when it's not, in my opinion, "literalarily" justified, it's whatever makes your boat float. The bottom line is how you feel about the story, if you're writing it for yourself, or how others see it, if you're writing it for popular consumption. We all have the right not to read or watch anything -- except what they give us in school, or at work, or what the spouse wants to see with you....

Aardvark

"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."

Mahatma Gandhi

"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."

Mahatma Gandhi

*huggles*

Just do what your heart tells you, even if it's cruel to your characters. The hard thing about writing is you have to listen to that little voice, because if you don't, the story usually ends up crashing and burning. Anything that happens in the story, I never blame the author, I blame the characters instead :D If you want to make a story like that, go for it, I need more villains to kill to relieve stress :D

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