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As I have ran through several edits to the story I realized how much was not fully explained and how I could extend the middle. I plan to have Tai relive each day, but, much like an episode of Star Trek TNG (Cause and Effect), slight changes are made each time she relives the day.
I also wanted to know if it is required to show more of what happens to during these loops.
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Once I read the chapter……
Which explained that the other boys wishes were making changes to her, and that they were abusing her - both mentally and physically/sexually - everything made sense.
Perhaps making that more obvious as the story develops might help, but the original version explains it all in the end anyway.
D. Eden
Dum Vivimus, Vivamus
Thank you.
Thank you.
Should I edit the chapters
Should I edit the chapters with the new set?
its your story to tell
if it was my story i would edit the chapters with a new set
IMOH……..
It would potentially make the story easier to follow, and thus more interesting to some readers - which could drive up the responses, and coincidentally the kudos/comments.
Having said that, it is your choice. As I previously stated, your explanation in the latter chapters made the story clear to me - and as I usually figure out what is going on in a story very quickly, not being able to do so was actually a plus for me. Knowing too early in the story just where the author is going tends to make it somewhat boring as it eliminates any mystery and subsequent anticipation of discovery.
D. Eden
Dum Vivimus, Vivamus
I have made edits, adding
I have made edits, adding about 2000 words, and have uploaded the updated versions to each chapter.
Thank you
I Think It'd Be Helpful...
...for future readers. But as the previous commenter said, it's up to you whether you want to spend more time on it rather than moving on to something else. (I do thank you for your PM explaining most of the things I was unclear about.)
Best, Eric