New novella, would appreciate feedback

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Edit: The story can be read HERE, the title is Purgatory: ReLife.

I've written the first 2 chapters of my next story, but they are dialogue heavy. If anyone would like to read them and give their opinion I would greatly appreciate it. I believe it is good, but I've never written a story with so much dialogue in one section so I'd like someone else's opinion before I post it. If you are interested please let me know and I will message the story to you. Below is the story summary:

Death isn’t the end, but is the opportunity to begin again. This is the story of second chances and unforeseeable consequences. By changing early regrets, the momentum of life will change in such unimaginable ways that not even knowing the future will help predict what happens next.

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Aurum's picture

I love the concept for this story and would hate to scare away readers if the start isn't appealing enough. Thanks to all!

If it moves the story along...

Patricia Marie Allen's picture

... I've always liked heavy dialog stories. I tend to get bored with long stretches of narrative. I want to know what the characters are thinking and how they are feeling. It's best for me if it comes in their own words, or thoughts.

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Patricia

Happiness is being all dressed up and HAVING some place to go.
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Thank you!

Aurum's picture

I appreciate your opinion. I had gotten mixed advice about the first chapter, but I really liked how it read so I went ahead and posted it. You can read it HERE.

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-Aurum

Interesting

What an interesting opening chapter. I will have to read more to figure out where this story is headed, but it has sparked my curiosity.

Joanna