what is the proper way to show a storys setting or backstory

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Im having a lot of trouble with this story idea of mine and starting it and trying to make it at least somewhat plausible so the reader can attempt to put in a suspension of disbelief. Its a horrific future setting in which all the forced femme cliches can take place and be like completely normal. something like romean society reawakened.Pretty young men sold, forced to be other mens concubines or lovers, chained up no choice. Their dressed and act the part and society doesn't think twice about it. BUt I feel that the backstory of how the hell it all took place needs to be told or else the reader will say its stupid the world isnt like this.

But as I found out, adding a few paragraphs at the beginning didnt work. The story didnt seem well received at all. Maybe it was the setting after a depression ruins everything is kind of implausible. I guess a depression wouldnt have that big of an impact. SO im rewriting it into something worse. In my story, society as we know it now is wiped out by a massive comet impact. What comes out of it is something from the dark ages. Its about one young man who finds himself sold by his family to be a other mans feminized concubine. That cant hapen now so if I just start with that wont the reader go to the next story as I have already ruined the suspension of disbelief. So how to I do this

It is YOUR story, right?

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The way to create a believable world, to place your story into, is not to worry how it would fit with the real world around you, BUT to make your world consistent within itself. Just because a comet hit the planet and took out most of the sentient life does NOT mean that there wouldn't still be families and that they wouldn't be poor enough to sell a child for resources to maintain the rest of the family. It would also be possible for the sentient life to have memories from before the cataclysm. They might be oral traditions or racial memories.

The simpler you keep the universe the easier it is to 'follow the rules of that universe'. If you bring in magic AND fancy sic-fi gimmicks, it quickly gets too complicated to let people suspend their disbelief.

Just some thoughts from - me - an unpopular author, to say the least, but an avid reader of a well written story.

with love,

Hope

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Backstory

You the author needs to know what happened to set up your story, but you don't necessarily need to tell it to the reader all at once. What you have to decide is how much of the backstory your POV character knows. Somewhere along the way you could have something like, "Timmi thought about all the stories his grandmother had shared about how things were in the Before, and wished to have been born back then, when people got to choose their own lives instead of having the elders decide for them. She prayed to all the gods that the Starhammer had never fallen and destroyed it all. But was it really true that people used to ride in boats that could sail through the sky?"

Struggling with that to

My solution is not the best but I spread the descriptions through out the story so they support the central theme. Like the many trunks of a Banion tree. A little here a little there usually not a narrative but woven into the story's dialog and conversations. In my present Havens Salvation I mix the history and back story into different sections of the story where a character is telling about how they met or where they experiences something. My story is a bit extreme in its timeline as several of the characters lives as adults when Rome occupied Britannia. The main supporting character is 3000 years old.

As long as it appears as a natural part of the story and does not always stand alone it does the job of supporting the story rather than being just a narrative of the back story. Also I write out the back story of the characters as a separate document. This brings the person to life to me and I can shade there reactions to situations accordingly. Much of the back story for my longer pieces myself comes from edited parts that I cut out because it is so pedantic.

In the end you can pick and chose how to do it by just reading other peoples work looking at the internal structure of how the story is constructed. And finding a way of keeping tract of the facts in supporting pages that never makes it into the public print. A character needs to live and breath to you before it can for your readers.

There are several open source writers programs that break things down in a systematic basis steps, or like me invent your own.

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Misha Nova

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Backstory.

This may or may not work for you... but I write from my characters' point of view. So, any backstory I have, the reader usually discovers during the course of the story, as the character discovers it.

People, places, history, all woven into what the character sees. With a little work, a good portion of that setting and backstory can be woven into observations the character makes about their world.

So far, I've yet to hear any complaints like "zomg your setting, mood and world suck" So I assume that isn't where I'm failing... something to try, if you can stand to write the way I do.

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Agree wholeheartedly

That's the way I do it as well. I actually think it makes for a better story that way since the reader is trying to work out what is going on, much as the character is.

I have a dystopia story you may wish to take a look at: The State Does Not Make Mistakes. I don't deliberately explain anything throughout the entire story.

Penny

BLAM!

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The masonry above Lucy's head exploded showering her with fragments of terra cotta brick. She dove and rolled, just as she had been taught in Mrs. Anderson's School for Dangerous Young Ladies. Coming up behind cover with her 4mm needle gun in her hand, she looked around for the Bogie who had targeted her. The damnable aliens weren't supposed to have penetrated Shropshire already.

Like that...

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Erin

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Is that a clip from an actual story? And, if so, what story? Because I think I really need to read that. Like, now. Space Marines meets Victorian. Yessssssss...

Pleeeeease!

Working on something...

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Not that but it is a steampunk saga with magic aliens.... :)

Hugs,
Erin

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Actually...

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...It was a dark and stormy night...

was once traditional, and was actually considered quite thrilling when this particular story was originally penned by Edward Bulwer-Lytton in the opening sentence of his 1830 novel Paul Clifford, first published in 1830.

It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents—except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets (for it is in London that our scene lies), rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness.

These days, flowery language is generally considered de trop, but was all the rage back in the 'Thirties, when literacy was more-or-less expected, and parenthetical meta-comments were taken well in stride.

Here's one from Hemingway's Hills Like White Elephants:

The hills across the valley of the Ebrol were long and white. On this side there was no shade and no trees and the station was between two lines of rails in the sun. Close against the side of the station there was the warm shadow of the building and a curtain, made of strings of bamboo beads, hung across the open door into the bar, to keep out flies. The American and the girl with him sat at a table in the shade, outside the building. It was very hot and the express from Barcelona would come in forty minutes. It stopped at this junction for two minutes and went on to Madrid.

Note that most twelve-year-olds wouldn't be forced to guess at many words, yet this sort of thing is (or was) considered “modern” whilst Bulwer-Lytton is regularly mocked and scorned by the current literati.

Note too that both opening sentences paint a scene, with more or less detail. This is because few of us are blind, and the first thing we do when dropped into a strange situation is to look around. If the story starts off in darkness, then describe what a blind men hears, perhaps punctuated by flashes of lightning, or a flickering fluorescent light.

These things tend to be faddish, with literary styles going in and out of fashion as regularly as Paris hemlines rise and fall, so don't be afraid to use your own judgement.

Everyone has different habits, including the sorts of things they read. Many won't read anything unless it starts on football pitch.

The best thing is to pick a few stories you really like, whose authors you admire, and then slavishly copy their strategy and style, but not their actual words.

Writing is one of the few trades which still requires an apprenticeship, and every serious author studies other authors with the same sort of concentration that rock musicians devote to the performances of Jimi Hendrix or B.B. King.

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Cheers,

Puddin'

A tender heart is an asset to an editor: it helps us be ruthless in a tactful way.
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Back story

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I can't add to what everyone else has said about how to expose your backstory. But, and this just me, I would think a future where men are bought and sold to be feminized would evolve from a severely corrupt and decadent society rather than emerging from a ruined society where just living might be a struggle. Slaves are luxeries...especially high maintenance ones like feminized men.

Melanie

Well...

Puddintane's picture

...sex workers of all sorts generally arise in societies in which there is gross inequality between social classes, where it's generally driven by desperation and greed, not necessarily in the same players, and cruelty is generally involved.

In the USA, the average age of entry into sex work for girls is twelve years. Think about that for half a second. Some girls are forced into prostitution as young as seven or eight.

There's a University of Pennsylvania study entitled “The Commercial Sexual Exploitation of Children In the U. S., Canada and Mexico,” which finds that the typical age range of entry into prostitution for boys, including gay and transgender boys, is from eleven to thirteen years of age.

It's always nice to start from something reasonable, or at least plausible in terms of some sort of objective reality, even if it's set in the far future or the past.

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Cheers,

Puddin'

A tender heart is an asset to an editor: it helps us be ruthless in a tactful way.
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I understand that

its just a way to introduce the forced femme cliche. But like reality in our time, most sex servants and slaves will be women. many will like young unfeminized men. ONly a limited few really want feminized men. And the story will be about one whose chosen and sold by his heartless father.

And it will be the rich and powerful who does it. They can afford it

Back story

The way I do it is start with the story and go back in time, write what you need to say and then continue the story line, much the same way I did with Assassin. Good luck, Arecee

Don't over egg the pudding

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Explain things as simply as you can in as few words as you can. They say that before the time of darkness, a hundred summers ago, things were different...

Good luck.

Angharad

Angharad

The Worst Way

The Worst Possible Way to provide backstory is to dump several paragraphs of exposition on your reader right out of the blocks.

Your reader wants a story . . . they will willfully suspend their disbelief if your story appeals to their senses immediately and has a compelling story question that is revealed within the first few paragraphs.

To give your future society plausibility you might want to offer explanations, but make them integral to telling the story.

I've tried a few stories like what you've written. They're fun and that's the main thing.

Plausibility is strong as long as you don't break the rules of YOUR universe. I don't have to know why donkeys talk in your universe, I just need to know that you won't make an ass out of me by violating that rule.

Jill

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Credible universes

Universi?

Anyway, first I try to keep the laws of nature internally consistent (if it's a different reality). Then I map out and religiously adhere to the story's histories in my head. These, what happened before, will come as they come - in conversation, thought or narration - but always, as in real life, they're framed in the story's present.

I realize that I leave out any deliberate backstory or expository strategy, but that's just the way I ride!

:-)

Making a prologue for backstory

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My prologue for the story Vendetta (Click Here) received great response. I was told that people who read it became interested right away to my story. Have a look, maybe you can find some inspiration?

My suggestion, try to answer the following questions:
1)What brought about the change?
2)How did the change started?
3)Were there any opposition to the change?
4)How did it go out of control?
5)How did it come to be that people consider it normal?

This system is good if the current setting and the origin (backstory) is far apart, like in my case, it's a year apart. It can also work for 50-100 years. Also it's best to use the prologue system if you have a lot of things to reveal from the start, with additional backstory to be added along the course of the story. Imagine the start of Battle Royale movies, the way they tell the backstory of how society condemns a class of teenagers every year to kill each other in a deserted island, because the adults are afraid of them.

Personally, I think in a dystopian world where everything is so vastly different from our current lifestyle, a prologue system to tell the basic backstory is the best.

of course content could be an issue>

Sadarsa's picture

I mean, a story like that i would think only appeals to a small niche group... i know i avoid stories of that nature like the plague.

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