I have long enjoyed reading the many good stories on BCTS which involve magic, mystery and intrigue.
On occasion I get some good story ideas, yet lack the skill ( my opinion ) to write a good tale. I guess my style is more akin to writing an operating manual for a Bull-dozer.
To this end I have had an idea for a story where I would welcome any authors to run with the concept below:-
1. A young man is seen whilst on vacation in a European city such as Paris, Berlin, Munich etc.
2. Later we see this man ( say 35 years of age ) visiting a lawyer in London for a reading of a will. His mother died recemtly in the U.S. and in the will an offer is made concerning employment.
3. After arriving in U.S. and organising his affairs he has lunch with an old friend of his mothers and discusses the job offer.
4. The man starts work as a caretaker at an all girls school, of note is that his apartment is directly above one of the dormatories.
5. Some months later our guy is approached by the his mothers old friend and asked to go under cover as one of the girls in order to help solve a mystery ( think Dan Brown ).
6. Next we see our heroine waking up as a girl and dreading having to attend classes. Such is the scale of the mystery our heroine has to deal with intrigue, murder, and hostility from some of the other girls.
7. Our heroine learns that there are several witch factions, and some dislike her interest in their affairs. She decides that her involvement with the staff is best kept quiet, especially now her safety is hn doubt.
8. Much later our heroine gets some much needed help from an unexpected source, her mother who she thought was dead.
9. Our heroine learns that her mother had to fake her death and hide in plain sight while hunting a rogue witch and the faction she lead.
10. The school becomes a battle ground as good and evil fight a bitter war over the future of humanity.
11. Finally the battle is over and the rogue faction has been eliminated. The victors celibrate and remember the founding principles of why the school was created.
12. Our heroine decides not to revert and remain a girl and a student at the school. Like mother like daughter, our girl has the potential to become a great witch.
I think that this story concept has great potential to include a sequel, with further adventures waiting to be told. Please feel free to use this concept and make it your own.
Comments
You're taken the first steps.
You've got your outline. You've already started writing this. Seriously, at this point, anyone taking this up would likely do things "wrong," or at least differently than you imagine them. If writing the whole thing at once is too much, break it into smaller chunks and post it in sections. You can refine your writing as you go. The people on this site are pretty good at encouraging new authors and will give be appreciative of your story as you develop your storytelling. Good luck!
Miranda
Practice
As with any skill, one does not simply take up writing one day and crank out a great work of fiction first time out of the blocks. Good writing requires practice and coaching. You learn to write well by writing.
Great story ideas are a dime a dozen. People who can mold them into good stories are not.
There are more than enough people here on TS/BC who are willing to help new writers, (and old ones) by reading, editing and helping writers beat their stories into shape. I suggest you take this great idea of yours and try to make a story of it yourself. It will not be easy at first. And you may well become frustrated until you settle into a style of your own. But the rewards will be many.
What do you have to lose but your own self imposed apprehensions.
Nancy Cole
"You may be what you resolve to be."
T.J. Jackson
Not Bad
It reminds me a bit of a made for TV movie I saw about twenty years ago or so where a young woman enrolls undercover at the school where her sister was murdered. I wouldn't write a story exactly as you describe for various reasons, and you leave a LOT to the imagination in items 6 and 7 (the whole main part of the story! :) ), but as a very general outline, you create an intriguing and logical reason for becoming a girl in a girl's school, a plot to keep things on track, and a fairly decent, subjectively speaking, ending.
It's food for thought, for sure.
Aardvark
"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."
Mahatma Gandhi
"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."
Mahatma Gandhi
I'll add in my own bit here, too.
I agree with the others that you have the story ready to go and quite obviously have a clear idea of what to do with it, the characters, and all else involved. The premise holds up, as does the protaganist's motivations.
If someone else were to pick this up, as has been said, I believe you would be disappointed with the results no matter who did it.
I have to go with the other people who have commented on this that you would be happier with the thing if you were writing it yourself. There are a lot of very good writers contributing to this site, and it is one of the friendlier ones around for new writers to stretch their wings, and learn to fly, so to speak.
Help, advice, suggestions, encouragement, all are right here for the asking. I know how hesitant I was to actually put my first story out for public view, but we've all been there at one time. The trick is to just get started and learn as you go. You won't lack for assistance, advice or teaching here, I do know that.
Maggie
That sounds like a good plot
That sounds like a good plot to a manga.