Let us cut the bullshit.

You hated The Seamstress and her Moth Part 1, The Seamstress and her Moth Part 2, and The Seamstress and Her Moth Part 3.
Not the good kind —the kind that claws at your ribs and makes you root for the train wreck. No, this was the other kind… revulsion and worse, disinterest.
Like the sour aftertaste of a joke that punched down instead of sideways.
So. Let me ask you the ugly: Did I fuck up?
Lanie was supposed to be your guilty pleasure. You were meant to loathe her, sure—the way she collects cocks like bottle caps would make you hate her. But did I succeed in making you think that her every fuck was a funeral?
I thought you’d need to know why. Why does she never drink from the fountain of love she hoards? Why instead, she stitches that love into curses and calls it couture. Why she would rather burn a man to ash than let him see her flinch.
And Georgie. Christ. I wanted you to ache for him. Not the weak, trembling thing in chains—but the demon under the skin. The one who splits firewood and other unspoken things. The man who bleeds loyalty sharper than Lanie’s stilettos.
Did you feel it? That slow unravelling? The way his rage simmers beneath “yes ma’am,” how survival becomes his love language? Or did I drown him in silk and cum stains?
Did I reduce him to a punchline?
You were supposed to taste blood in each page, yet feel guilty laughing at the twisted wit. You were supposed to wonder about why these wings beat toward a flame that’ll charge them to nothing.
Lanie’s not the flame, she never was. See—she’s the moth. Georgie too. Both circling that sweet ending. Destroy me, ruin me, love me harder. Isn’t that all any of us do? Cling to the hands that blister us even as they drive us.... somewhere.. anywhere. Just to feel alive?
But maybe I went too raw. Let the needle slip too deep.
When Lanie does what she does… did you see the cracks? The way her scales flicker because Georgie’s voice cuts out? “Bring her back!” isn’t a command—it’s a confession, raw as a fresh wound. When she pockets Evelyn’s vial, her hands shake not from guilt, but terror: what if indeed it does fix what she’s broken? And when her hat slips at the club, she stabs that bobby pin like a stake through her own myth—if the costume fails, what’s left of her?
Moth wings aren’t fragile; they’re meant to fray. But did I thread that needle right? Or just leave you picking wingdust from your teeth?
I don’t know anymore.
The heart of this story isn’t in the silk or the stitches. It’s in the can buried under the magnolia tree. The scar on Lanie’s collarbone. The way Georgie folds towels and cooks dinner because some part of him still believes in what they have even when everything has turned to shit.
Love isn’t the Ball gown. It’s the moth chewing through the threads.
But maybe I didn’t sew that into the seams hard enough. Maybe I let the bloodstains overshadow the heartbeat.
So tell me true:
When that last moth finally turns to ash, do you blame the fire… or the fucked-up part of us all that still whispers, 'This time, the light won’t burn?'
Do you buy it? Love can be a barnacle—ugly, clinging, but irrefutable proof you...WE survived many a storm?
Or did I just make you want to gargle bleach till you forget?
FlyingMonkey
P.S. Evelyn left a vial on my porch. Still untouched. Some part of me’s terrified that if I drink it, I’ll finally see this story for what it is: a love letter or a suicide note.
P.P.S. To the anon who sent me a box of dead moths: fuck you. But also, thanks. They’re pinned above my keyboard now.
Comments
Sex
You wanted to know what it was about the story I didn't like; why I was disinterested. In a word: sex.
The say, "Sex sells" but in my case, blatant sex repels. Your tags say it all:
Mind you that's a personal opinion and I would never tell you that you shouldn't write that kind of story, or that you shouldn't post it here. I really appreciate you tagging it the way you did, so that I was forewarned. But, just so you know, it's not that you aren't a good author or that you didn't succeed in what you attempted, it's just that I always give stories tagged like that a pass.
Hugs
Patricia
Happiness is being all dressed up and HAVING some place to go.
Semper in femineo gerunt
Ich bin eine Mann
Thanks for this
My next story is far less "sexed up," but right now, I'm in fist deep—or is it the other way around? (Yeah, I went there… lol). Let me ride the waves, both hard and soft as it nears it's climax. Once I catch my breath and a smoke, it'll be time for a clearer head for future yahoos.
Too much sex….
Ummm. The Anita Blake stories were drowning under too much sex and too little plot for a while. Lost many readers - including me - but the author pulled back on the sex somewhat and made it a crucial plot device (aurduor ). If I want to read porn (rarely) there is literotica. In books the sex must move the plot to keep me reading. BC warnings help me avoid much of that.
BAK 0.25tspgirl
But sex is purely a plot device for me
It's meant to be the background noise as I explore deeper themes. There's lots of 'little sex' by design.
One interesting aspect of this story is that I never describe the appearance of the principal characters—not even once. That too was a deliberate choice. Give it a read and see if you notice.
My Stories Often Contain BDSM
Yeah, I have a kinky bent and many don't like that.
Gwen Brown
Awwww... My kind of love stories
There. I said it.
A cautious reflection . . .
FM, your writing voice is very unique — at least in my experience, which in this instance may not be broad. I have absolutely no doubt that you have the capacity to write stories that would hit the pleasure centers of a wide audience here at BC, or anywhere else you chose to publish, because your writing is technically proficient and emotionally charged. But why would you want to write in anyone else’s voice?
As you know — because I’ve said so — I don’t read or write a lot of erotica. Partly that’s because it often feels like the plot is just a mechanism to get from one sex scene to the next. This story, however, isn’t like that at all, though there is lots and lots of sex in it. It feels more like a deeply emotional exploration of the pathologies of love, lust, obsession and compulsion. Your imagery is almost painfully vivid. I personally think it’s your best work.
But stories about the dark side of love, just like stories about any deep darkness, are going to have built-in limits in the number of people who will read them. I think that’s even more true within the trans community, honestly. So much darkness in our own lives; people may be longing for stories that provide a little relief.
— Emma
Thanks for this
Thanks for truly understanding where I am going with this. Much harder to say less than more. I truly feel it now
I Couldn't Do It
Your own choice is to write a story that is highly charged sexually. That's fine, but I don't think it will grant you a wide audience acceptance here on BC and I have told you so.
I do believe your writing style is much better now, less frenetic, more readable, a smaller cast of characters to relate to...or not. That's a matter of taste.
But your subject matter still leaves me somewhat confused. I did not relate to your intended characterizations. You wanted your reader to see Lanie as the victim and Georgie as the aggressor. It just did not strike me that way. I missed your subtlety and that is my failing.
Maybe your next story will find me less literal and we'll have a meeting of minds.
Oh no. You are NOT wrong.
At the risk of giving away spoilers, no. George is not the agressor, Lanie is but... Is she also a victim?
The chapter tonight should reveal a lot.
Arghhhh .. mobile typos... Hate them
Love,
Flyingmonkey
The ones
The ones that just sit there aren't so great either. :)
= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.
Don't knock it
Sex is a normal facet of some of the relationships that we enjoy as adults. If you can set aside the agendas of certain "authority figures" (who really shouldn't be in the room or in your head while you engage in sexual activity), you're left with a source of physical and emotional pleasure, strengthening the bond you have with a partner. That's why dolphins, chimps, etc. do it - not just for procreation.
Healthy, mindful people engage in sexual activity, releasing endorphins, relieving stress and boosting their mood. They share this most private aspect of their life with few, very close people... which is probably particularly important to those who are self-conscious about their bodies, their lifestyle, etc. Think of sex (in private, in safety and with a loving partner) as a way to express yourself creatively - and to explore your sexuality: a journey and not a fixed role dictated by your parents, your pastor or your politicians.
Medics say it improves sleep, is a form of exercise, and boosts the immune system, too. You don't need a prescription and it needn't cost money. Sex is fun: have some!
At the very least, don't let a vocal minority stifle your literary inclinations.
Sugar and Spiiice – TG Fiction by Bryony Marsh