a question about a story i am writing

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The question concerns the method of foreshadowing future events. When is it good and when it is it revealing too much
theres a young man who will be captured and turned into a feminine sex slave later in the story. I show him going though his life, helping people
I had planed on showing his step mothers moves as she conspires to have him captured later in the story. showing her conspiracy and the people she meets, pays and shows the mechanisms working behind the scenes of his life to rip it apart. It was going to be good

then i started asking myself, i know it is good and i think it adds some suspense but is it foreshadowing too much. Showing he will be captures and how. then why read the story when im showing what will eventually happen

Maybe I shold leave that out and when he is captured, it is more shocking. but Id like to show why and how cruel she is to have this done
The struggle is how he deals with it, and how strong he becomes.
The point of the story is that he is a good caring man who will go out of his way to help people. Which is his downfall. his struggle for freedom and in the end, hes dark and vengeful and cruel just like his step mother. he was made that way
But do the more experienced writers think of the issue

Reading Is Guessing

Readers want to guess what will happen.

Good readers set up action/reaction sequences that allow the reader to ask themselves, "What will happen next?" and then be rewarded by the proper reaction so they can say to themselves, "I thought so!"

Bill had spent almost a month sweating the details of her gift.

She allowed five excruciating minutes to grind by opening her present, commenting on the silly wrapping paper and tying the golden bow to something that occurred in her last day of work before Christmas. Finally she lifted the cardboard lid and slid aside the tissue.

She gasped. "It's perfect!"

Foreshadowing allows the reader to more accurately guess. Your can intentionally mislead your reader with a "red herring", but you must always be fair.

Fairness is the standard for being a "perfect" writer.

If the reader feels you're fair with the proper amount of foreshadowing without spoiling their opportunity to guess they will gasp and give you a kudos.

Of course, a kudos is much more of a popularity contest -- genre selection -- following building -- sort of thing, than any accurate measure of quality of writing.

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Thank you Angela

I would like to talk to you about what you sugest I do with this or what I could do. I dont know why I cant send anyone a message. They dont seem to work

What could I do, do you think this could work and still be suspenseful

how

i dont see any way to send private messages