Half Lilin Rewrite

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Thank you to those who mailed me asking me when I would continue to story. I'm sorry that it took me so long to continue. I just had a tiny bit of problem. Still has, but I think I'll try to ignore it and just start writing again.

However, when I reread the story earlier, I was horrified at the lack of imagery in the story. I mean, I know how it goes, how the characters look like because I can see them all in my head. The readers can't see what I see, so I decided to do a rewrite. Nothing major, but I will try to address the problem with giving more life to the characters.

For example, Lilith doesn't have wings while her three retinue do. Unfortunately, due to my shortcomings, I'm not sure how many caught that little detail.

The new chapter is already done, I just need to type it down and send it to Stan for editing. If anyone wants to reread the story, please wait until I post the new chapter as by then, the story would have been rewritten.

Thanks to all who supported me.

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When I read the caption

I was all "Wha-wha-whaaat?!" Phew. Do not worry, I'm all better now. ;)

I consider it a shortcoming of mine - I can easily be absorbed with the plot and not pay a lot of attention to imagery. I don't know about others, but I usually don't have a straight image when reading about something. But if you think the story will benefit it is great!

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Truthfully

I just did what a lot of people do and pictured the characters on my own, so it was no problem at all for me. Though the rewrite does sound like a pretty good idea. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter in this story.

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Thanks for the feedback. It's good to know that my errors didn't hamper the reading experience, though I still think I owed it to the readers to make things clearer.

Oh and the part where Sarai exposed her participation in the Baphomet War, I intend to change. After reading it a few times, I found it to be boring. Please wait for the good news. I've already finished writing the new chapter, but I'll edit the previous chapters before I post the new one.