A Djinna Tale *REVISED*

I love it so far! I pray that your life becomes less crazed, and that you will find time to write soon. As I said before, no pressure, I can wait. Patiently. Well, kinda.

Wren

It's irresponsible...

of me not to finish them. But like many here, time has become an issue for me, what with all the clutter and noise of RL. I promise I will finish them, Wren.

A lovely snippet, hope you are up to writing more soon.

But the you have a number of excelent unfinshed works "in the fire."

John in Wauwatosa

I've certainly left more than my fair share dangling, John!

Thanks for the kind words, though. New Year's rez - to finish at least two of them early 2012.

-A

Armond... That story makes

Armond... That story makes me cry... If you'll ever put it up here don't forget the tissue allert ;')

I wonder if "Nate! Where are you?" counts as a wish...
Jake doesn't make much of a villian, but that's actually a great thing. Not every person is cut out for helping other people and most people mostly care for themselves and maybe their closest family. Truth to be told I doubt my opionions wouldn't be much different, although I hope I'd care a bit more for the feelings of a girl that cared for me over a year...

Stories like this make me wonder if it is really a smart idea to teach children to be egoistic so they have better chances in the capitalistic society. The result are people who avoid all people with problems, because they can't stand suffering of people. Avoidance of problems and egoism. Lol... sort of like the major problems of society ^^

Whatever, I totally like the new part, it's awesome... I can't wait for the next one.

I wonder if Jake will get hold of Azura... trying to use her to improve the world. I can so see him feeling guilty about being lazy to use her as an opportunity to make it all better and actually causing a bruce-almighty problem. Well it depends on his smartness. He's obviously not as good a person as Nate/Azura and Rachel, but he's not exactly evil. A normal person who thinks he's entitled to something. I guess it is the same as with every person. They can amount for good, for evil or for nothing. I wonder how you'll develope this, or if he'll even have another appearance.

Thank you for writing this awesome story,

Beyogi

The Road Not Taken

Thanks, Beyogi,

One of the reasons I sent this story into hiatus was because it was headed to the Land of Cliches. It may still sail there, but I am trying to steer clear of it (and hopefully I haven't just used metaphors that are too cliched, also).

Anyway, in one of your earlier comments, you described a plot line that you hoped the story wouldn't take, where Jacob is made into the cardboard villain. It was a great comment, and very accurate. That was where I was headed. So I took a step back from the story and waited for a different meaning to come. I think (hope) it has, for the new message (which involves a little (but not much) rewriting of the earlier sections, is how do you know if there is such an animal as a soul mate, and if there is, how do you find yours? In this story, Robert and Zazu are (more about this will be touched on later in the story) and Rachel and Azura/Nate need to figure out if they are too.

-A

Djinna: Questions and guesses

Well I'm glad he's not the Cardbord villian turning Azura and Rachel into his personal harem maids.

I'm wondering about your wishing rules. If someone would wish for all suffering on earth to end, would that end all suffering, end all life or just rename earth?
The Djinna seem to grant an unlimited amount of wishes. I wonder if someone can wish to know the consequences of a wish beforehand: "I wish to know the consequences of wishing that humanity won't use money anymore."

Another thing: What was actually the reason for the explosion at the burger-shop? Nate wishing for Rachel to stay?

I wonder if that family curse thing really is a curse. I mean it seems rather unfair to punish someone for the bad luck to be born into the wrong family. Cursing the queen is one thing, but cursing the offspring of her offspring? Seems to be a major disturbance of the "balance" ^^
I sort of wonder if Azura will have another audience with Ahanita if only to get her to rescint the slavery bit. It's not like everyone of them has the soul of the queen. Even if that was the case, she'd have had more incarnations by now than people died in the draught. I wonder if Azura can demand a retrial, for unjustified punishment or something. It's not like Nate did anything that deserved this kind of punishment and I doubt punishing someone for crimes commited by family members (family liability? - I don't know the correct english word for this) is legal in the US.

Well thinking about the origins of the djinna the story becomes way more complicated... Especially since Ahanita calls Nate "love". I wonder if she'll do something about Azura and Rachels problem, she ought to if she really loves her djinnas.

About the humility thing and the slavery: Can they actually commit suicide? I mean the wrong master might do stuff with them, which might take away their will to live. Or is there a limit for what a "master" can do? I imagine a sadist with a djinna slave, who hates the stuff, but can't do anything because she has to obey.
You tend to do the karma-reincarnation thingy in your stories, so it might be a punishment for a previous life, but still... I don'T see the point of torture as punishment.
I wonder if Djinnas can be killed at all...

Who actually grants the wishes in the end? The djinnas with power of the goddess, or the goddess using the djinna as somekind of intrpretation device?
Zuzu's wish might become really problematic for Azura and Rachel, if it really forces her to convince herself that djinna's don't exist.

Oh well... I wonder why Azura thinks they can't be together. It's not like Azura can become a guy again or change her own sexuality, but Rachel can wish for hers to fit. If they really are soulmates, Rachel might need to become a heterosexual guy though. A big genie gender bender adventure for both of them.

I can't wait to see how you'll continue this and whether Ahanita really is a petty goddess like all those greek one's.
I just reread the story and came up with those questions and guesses. I hope it'll help somehow.

Beyogi

Great thoughts as always, Beyogi

As to the wish rules, there is such a rich tradition of this, starting with A Thousand and One Nights, that I didn't want to address it here. The fun in those stories is the challenge of wording your wish correctly, so you get what you want, and not something unexpected (i.e your words twisted by a malicious genie).

The genies in my story are charged with helping mankind. The trick for them is to figure out what a wisher really needs, instead of what he or she has wished for.

As far as the goddess' ultimate intentions toward her djinna 'crew', and the 'master' thing, that will be explained in the final chapters.

Also, as to Rachel and Azura, rest assured Rachel will get creative once she gets her wishing going.

Thanks, and here's 'wishing' you a Merry Christmas.

-A

Missed this!

The blog got pushed to the bottom of the page before I could see it Saturday. Fortunately I followed another comment to it. Wonderful news that you're writing again. 'A Dijinna Tale' is one of your pieces that I most want to see completed. Rachel got exactly what she wanted, but I have to feel so very sorry for Nate. Maybe his/her soul is unchanged, but the life that was his was killed by her wish. All of those who might've been helped by his profession is now on their own. Sure she will help others as mandated by the Goddess, but his life is forever gone. I feared the selfish Jacob would track down the cause of his cure and try to enslave her, but it appears that danger is passed. Wonderful stuff here!
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Grover

Grover, thanks to gentle prodding from you and Wren...

...I had a mini-creativity burst, and felt like finishing A Djinna Tale. I expect to finish and post here before New Year's Day.

Until then, Merry Christmas!

-A

Gone?

I couldn’t find this on your web site, nor on Fictionmania, either. I would love to read it, even if it is unfinished.....?

Link not working?

I'm not familiar with this tale and the link did not seem to go anywhere.

A Djinna Tale REVISED

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Thanks, Beyogi!

Thank you!