I've decided to do a massive rewrite on Lilim Tales Part 3. The result is the version posted here will differ significantly from the one on FM.
I am truly sorry for the delay. But I believe Parts 3 and 4 will be better for it.
-Armond
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Take your time, get it to where YOU like it.
I want to read the story, but I try to read it as if I was looking through your eyes. To do that, the story has to be written the way you see it.I'll wait (uses puppy dog eyes "Do I have to wait very long?") as long as I got to. Don't worry about it.
Wren
Thanks, Wren. It wasn't
Thanks, Wren. It wasn't feeling right. Cassie was accepting her fate far too easily (and too soon), and the story climax was happening in Part 3 instead of Part 4.
The rewrite will be days, not weeks.
-A
That depends on the climax...
I was having a vision of the fourth chapter of the first version being a sort of confrontation where Cassie has to stand her ground and stop Jayden from making no less than fourth rash decision in a week, the first three being actually injecting Cody with a formula, drugging Cassie, and breaking into that disasterous flight. And they had progressively worse consequences, producing a falling out with Luna and nearly resulting in his own death.
This fourth decision would have been indiscriminately erasing the 'savior group''s memories of Cassie and her situation, thus robbing her of any human friends. Not something that would make her a happy srryn, that's for certain!
So it was like putting a certainty that it was not Cassie who was controlled, but was actually in control of the important decisions.
Faraway
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Faraway
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Again you amaze me Faraway...
because a memory wipe was a possible outcome I considered for Part 4. Based on your request, it will not go that way, I promise.
I'm very sure
I'm very sure that whatever you do won't disappoint. Why? Simple. Your stories never do that. At least not for me. I'll be patient and look forward to what you do with this very intriguing story.
Maggie