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Lumina
Chapter 4 - Family

Andrew has a choice to make

As the days turned into weeks, I found myself settling into my new life as Cameronite's daughter. I had everything I could ever want – pretty dresses, shiny toys, and all the attention I could ever ask for. But despite all of this, there was still a part of me that missed my family.

I missed my mom and dad and the way they used to tuck me into bed at night and read me bedtime stories. I missed my sister and the way she used to tease me and make me laugh until my sides hurt. I missed the way we used to fight and argue. I missed the fact that I had no one to blame when I did something wrong.

But as the days turned into weeks, I began to realise something: they didn't want me. They had never wanted me. How could they just abandon me like that, leaving me to fend for myself in the clutches of a supervillain? Didn't they love me? Didn't they care about what happened to me?

But then, a thought occurred to me: maybe I didn't need them. Maybe I was better off without them. After all, being a brother had taught me a thing or two about being evil. I was good at it. I was really good at it. I liked being evil, being bad, and being everything my family had never wanted me to be. Because for the first time in my life, I felt powerful, unstoppable, like I was finally in control of my own destiny.

And as I looked around at all my pretty dresses and shiny toys, I couldn't help but smile. Maybe being spoiled wasn't such a bad thing after all. Maybe it was just what I needed to finally find my place in the world.

But then, one day, everything changed. My family came bursting through the door, their faces filled with relief and joy. They said they had finally found me and that they had never stopped looking for me. I did not believe them when they spent all this time looking for me. They had never wanted me. And you know what else? I didn't want them, either. Because for the first time in my life, I was happy. I was finally where I belonged, surrounded by pink and glitter and all things girly.

As I stood before my parents, dressed in my pretty pink dress and twirling around with glee, I couldn't help but feel a sense of satisfaction. They had finally found me. It was too little, too late.

My mom's eyes widened in shock as she took in my appearance. "Andrew," she said, her voice filled with concern. "Why are you dressed like that? Why are you pretending to be a girl?"

But I didn't answer. I didn't have to. Because deep down, I knew the truth – I was a girl. I was meant to be a girl.

And so, without saying a word, I led my parents to a room where they had no powers, a room lined with lead to block their abilities. They didn't suspect a thing. They trusted me and believed that I was their son, their little Andrew. I wasn't. I was Lumina, the evil hero, the girl who had finally found her place in the world. And as I walked out of the lead room and locked the door behind me, I couldn't help but smile. I was finally in control. I was finally the one calling the shots, the one deciding my own destiny.

But then, a voice broke through my thoughts – my mom's voice, filled with confusion and fear. "Andrew," she said, her voice trembling. "Why are you doing this? Why are you locking us up like this?" But I didn't answer. I didn't have to. Because deep down, I knew the truth: I was doing this to protect myself and my newfound happiness. I wasn't about to let anyone take that away from me. Not even my own family.

But then, as I looked into my mom's eyes, a sense of doubt crept into my mind. Was I really doing the right thing? Was I really willing to sacrifice my own family for my own happiness? I didn't know the answer. But deep down, I knew one thing for sure: I couldn't let them ruin everything I had worked so hard for.

And then, just as I was about to leave, Cameronite appeared, his eyes gleaming with malice. "Well done, my dear," he said, his voice dripping with satisfaction. "You've done exactly as I asked. I couldn't be prouder."

But then, his smile faded, replaced by a look of pure evil. "But now," he said, his voice low and dangerous. "Now, it's time for you to finish the job. It's time for you to kill your family. I expect you to do it. Soon."

As I stood there, facing my family and the man who had become my new father, a wave of conflicting emotions washed over me. I had just revealed the truth to them – that I was Lumina and that now Cameronite was my dad. It was both terrifying and liberating at the same time.

"Dad, Mom, Sarah," I said, my voice barely above a whisper. "I... I'm Lumina. Cameronite is now my dad. This is my new home. You never wanted me. He does!"

Their expressions shifted from shock to disbelief, and then to sadness. It broke my heart to see them like that and to know that I was the cause of their pain. I had to stay strong. I had to do what was best for me, even if it meant hurting the people I loved.

But then, something unexpected happened. My dad stepped forward, his eyes filled with love and understanding. "Andrew," he said, his voice soft and gentle. "We love you, no matter what. Even if you do feel like a girl."

His words touched me in a way I couldn't describe. It was like a weight had been lifted off my shoulders like I could finally breathe again. It made me realise just how much my family truly cared about me, even after everything I had done. A sense of guilt washed over me. They didn't deserve this, didn't deserve to be locked up like prisoners. I couldn't just stand by and do nothing.

"Dad," I called out to Cameronite, my voice filled with desperation. "Can't we just let them go? Can't we just forget about all of this and be a family again?"

But Cameronite just laughed, his voice dripping with malice. "Oh, Lumina," he said, his eyes gleaming with amusement. "You still have so much to learn. But don't worry, my dear. You'll have plenty of opportunities to prove your loyalty to me."

He was right. I did have a lot to learn and a lot to prove. I was ready to do whatever it took. Family is family, no matter what. I was going to do everything in my power to protect mine.

As I stood amidst the chaos of Cameronite's hideout, a whirlwind of emotions raged inside me. Confusion, regret, and anger – they all battled for dominance in my mind, leaving me feeling utterly lost and alone. How had everything gone so wrong? How had I let myself be manipulated by someone like Cameronite? But then, amidst the chaos, a realisation dawned on me: Cameronite had been using me all along. He didn't love me. He didn't care about me. He just wanted to corrupt me, to turn me into his pawn in his quest for power. I wasn't going to let him get away with it.

With a newfound sense of determination, I sprang into action. I knew I had to make things right to undo the damage I had caused. I was going to do whatever it took to make that happen. So, with a plan forming in my mind, I set to work. I helped my parents escape from their makeshift prison, using my newfound powers to break through the barriers that held them captive. It felt good. It felt really good to finally be doing something right and to be on the side of good once again.

But our work wasn't done yet. We still had to deal with Cameronite to put an end to his evil schemes once and for all. We were ready for him. We were ready to fight and to protect the city we loved from the forces of darkness. And so, with renewed determination, we confronted Cameronite in the heart of his hideout. The battle was fierce, and the stakes were high. As a family working together, we were stronger. We fought with everything we had, using our powers and our wits to outsmart our foe.

In the end, we emerged victorious. We defeated Cameronite and destroyed his hideout, putting an end to his reign of terror once and for all. It felt good. It felt really good to finally put an end to the chaos, and bring peace back to our city.

But our victory came at a cost. We had all been hurt, both physically and emotionally, by Cameronite's actions. It would take time for us to heal and come to terms with everything that had happened. We hugged each other and forgave each other. My family told me they would support me with my new identity as a girl. My sister even thought it was nice that i was now her sister. Lumina was now part of the superhero team.

We had each other. That was all that mattered. Family is family, no matter what. We would always be there for each other, no matter what challenges lay ahead. And so, as we made our way back home, battered but unbroken, I couldn't help but smile. Because you know what? Our journey was far from over. I couldn't wait to see what the future had in store for us. My life as a superhero was just beginning. I was ready for it, together with my family.

The end of the story for you, and the start for me.


note:
This story was an experiment. I noticed some people used AI to generate stories, so I figured I should try it. While I think that the story is cute, it has also shown me that AI is not for me. I ended up editing most of it while adding parts and taking away parts. The process was not as fun as it usually is when I do stories. Usually I find myself emersed in the story that I am writing, where the muse leads me to unexpected places. This time I felt like I was an editor, and it would have been easier to do it myself from the start. It felt like I was cheating on an exam. Still, it was an experiment, and I can say I tried it. Despite all this, I hope you liked the story.
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An interesting experiment.

But disappointing from the reader's side as well, I think. The samples of AI writing I've looked at, both fiction and non-fiction, seem wooden, lazy; rushed through, with little character development, and weak POV. One problem with the LLMs (large language models) might be GIGO, Garbage In, Garbage Out. The corpus fed to these models tends to be huge swaths of the internet. Who wrote, “90% of everything is crap”? That number needs to be pushed far up for internet writing, well over 99%, I'd say. (Present company excluded; there's a fair percentage of good writing on BigCloset.) Feeding an LLM the whole internet is like parking a child in front of Fox (anti-)News, how will they ever learn?
I do a lot of technical writing and programming, and have followed the efforts at AI my whole life, I expect that AI output will soon be indistinguishable from human output, which may say more about the nature of creativity, than the qualities of AI :)

I just went back and noticed that this story got almost no comments, and the number of reads and kudos dropped for each chapter. I think this shows that the readership failed to engage with the story, perhaps sensing that there was little life behind it.

Victoria, please don't take these comments to heart, after all, you were the editor, and realized yourself the material wasn't worthy.

Thanks for the effort.

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lisa charlene's picture

id say i wasn't its kinda like those comic books i read as a kid . a typical superhero story good wins bad losses in the end .it was extremely predictable . very small amount of character growth but i dont think with this kind of story there is much room for it. some of the ai storys are great others not so much but in the end its your decision to make the story what you want. its been said many times on here write for your self and if the the readers like it great if not then all well to bad for them .i know thats harsh but kinda way things work.