Well it is better but probably more confusing than ever before. I think it confused more than entertained. I definitely need help any and all suggestions welcomed. Think the problem is more me than anything as i have a 8 track mind and need an upgrade. the problem is I really never wanted to publish the original. But My beloved Husband felt it should be shared so he opened an account as author on Storysite for me and I read it again a couple of weeks ago and could not believe how bad it was so.... that brings me to this latest version it is better Well I am not so embarrassed by it which in itself says a lot for how do you embarrass the girl that was listed in the High School Annual a the Slut just a little Sexual Dysphoria Ha , well I try to write and I love the people here in this community that my husband introduced me too, wish he would come back as my sister again though he seems to have killed that part of himself which is sad as well. Thank you all

Goddess Bless You All

LOVE Desiree Maureen Ryan Jones