Hey everyone, I've had some conflicting feelings about Trial by Fire. I feel that some of it is completely unnecessary and the torture scene shouldn't be there. Also, I think that the story should be more definite and realistic than the MC having a massive panic attack and being taken by the Silver Legion. I think there could be something better. I don't know though, I mean as some of you said, it's like the whole thing is going down a rabbit hole. The idea of the story isn't that, but to show a world through a narrative.
If you feel that Trial by Fire should be changed for whatever reason. Please be candid. I want to work on this story and truly make it more than just a cheap knock-off story with a half ass story and a Protagonist that everyone despises. Or a story that makes Alice in the Wonderland look tamed.
I have a few options running through my mind and most of them would be major revisions to chapter 2 and 3 (or Trial by Fire).
Anyway, thank you for reading my budding story and be candid.