Last Chapter - Comments please

So the last chapter of The Hands of the Morri is posted.

Enjoy the last bit of adventures of Asche and Nibs. I really like the story and have begun the edits based off material I researched, such as armor types and the like. I would love your feedback on the story so I can incorporate it into the edits. The story is expanding as I go and I have already turned one chapter into two, so that's going well. The final word count for this was just shy of 50k so I am looking to nearly double the size of the book with the edits.

With my process, I do two edit passes where I try to add story bits that give more detail and more meat. Then there is a pass where I just focus on sensory details, in case I haven't added enough of that. Lastly, I edit from back to front, cutting out excess words and making sure the grammar is correct. After that it's in good working order and I can start to ship it out to find a publisher. DAW, Berkley, and TOR are high on my list, because it is honestly right up their alleys.

So please, give me your comments, opinions, likes, dislikes, so I can use them to craft this as best as possible. I really like this first draft, love the characters especially Nibs, and think the story is interesting. Please help me make it better.