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I've got a question for anyone that's been following my serial, Stephanie's Deal.
In Episode 16, Stephanie is going to have a session with a psychiatrist. So that will entail a long stretch where all the action is doctor/patient dialogue.
Would people rather read a scene where the dialogue is given word-for-word, or where what they say is just described?
Something like this:
Once Mom had left, the doctor started. “So, tell me what it’s been like for you having to dress like a girl everyday.”
“At first, I thought it was going to be tough. But after a couple of days being a girl, it just kind of got easier. There’s even some stuff that isn’t so bad.”
“You know, it isn’t bad or wrong if you actually liked something about life as Stephanie.”
“It doesn’t make me some kind of gay sissy weirdo?”
“No, it doesn’t. It makes you a three-dimensional human being. There's no shame for a male to get in touch with his feminine side. And I won't tell anyone you don't want me to."
"Okay."
"So, was there anything about your time in dresses that you enjoyed?”
“Um, I guess I kind of liked it that people kept telling me I was pretty. Not even family ever really told me how I looked when I was a boy, but as a girl even strangers say I'm cute.”
Or this:
After Mom left, the doctor started by asking how Steven's experience dressing as a girl was. Stephanie wasn't sure how to answer, until Dr. Howard made it clear that it isn't a bad thing to have enjoyed it a little. She told her that it was nice to get more attention as a girl. Stephanie had been getting many more compliments than Steven ever did, and it felt good.
Or does it not make a difference to anyone?