Can I get some input on my story the Mistress, Please

I have completed two chapters of it and im on to the third chapter. But before I go too far in it, I would like some good input on what you think already? And what I could improve on. And if I want to revise or edit it which I know I need to do. How do I do it
And can someone help me find the parts that need strengthened, and ediited and what to look for when I try to do it
It what I have so for good or bad

I know I posted two other stories are ready. They are versions of this. I posted the first one, the New Daughter which didn't work out. I posted the second one, which was better than the New Daughter but it still had its problems. Now this one has fixed those plotholes and what I intend to go with. But since its still my first time trying to write a story, I would like someone with more experience to help me