Looking for an Editor for my Halloween Story

Hi everyone,
I've just finished my halloween story and I'd be greatful if someone could edit it.

As you may or may not know, english is not my mother tongue and suggestions on how to improve the grammar and the text in general would be greatly appreciated ;)

Oh and I can take critic ^^ So you can tell me what I've done wrong...
The story is about horror (who would have thougt ^^), fantasy, transformation and maybe erotica (not really, it's a lame assed attempt at best, I'll probably get hit for calling it erotica anyway)

Ok, everyone that is still interested, just write here or send me a PM...

Thank you for your time,

*hugs*
Beyogi